1)Do I have to discuss if there is a problem of obesity among young people?
2) Which group of people should be discussed?
Children? Adults? Or both?
Children? Adults? Or both?
The stages of writing
1 Analysing and understanding the task
2 idea generation (main ideas are extended with supporting statements and examples with the help of ‘and so’?
3 planning (general outlay of the essay)
4 writing stage
5 Post writing – Proofreading after you finish your essay. Read quickly to notice mistakes in grammar e.g. articles, prepositions, spelling, punctuation
1 Analysing and understanding the task
2 idea generation (main ideas are extended with supporting statements and examples with the help of ‘and so’?
3 planning (general outlay of the essay)
4 writing stage
5 Post writing – Proofreading after you finish your essay. Read quickly to notice mistakes in grammar e.g. articles, prepositions, spelling, punctuation
Planning
Intro:
Obesity serious problem. Both children and adults affected. Let’s take look at causes and solutions.
Body 1
Main idea / Central idea Cause: The change in eating habits
Adults – busy with work or studies and so? what it means? no time for cooking healthy meal. And so? More consumption pre-packaged / frozen or fast food
Children: less traditional healthy food at home and school canteens. High intake of junk food e.g. hamburgers, chips, and fried chicken
Solution
Adults: government; increase the sales tax on junk food / encourage healthy lifestyle e.g. by campaigns
Children: more healthy food at home/ strict control of school canteens And so? decreases the intake of unhealthy food
Body 2
Main idea 2 Inactive lifestyle. Modern facilities make us lazy. Too much time in front of the screen / less exercise outdoors. energy transfers into fat and so? leads to health problems
Body 2
Solution for the Main idea 2
Controlling the screen timing / exercising. And so? burn energy, keep fit and healthy. Also affects mental health
Conclusion
Obesity serious problem. Affecting all ages of people. Causes; are unhealthy food and inactive lifestyle. Solutions; making unhealthy food expensive and encourage healthy lifestyle.
Intro:
Obesity serious problem. Both children and adults affected. Let’s take look at causes and solutions.
Body 1
Main idea / Central idea Cause: The change in eating habits
Adults – busy with work or studies and so? what it means? no time for cooking healthy meal. And so? More consumption pre-packaged / frozen or fast food
Children: less traditional healthy food at home and school canteens. High intake of junk food e.g. hamburgers, chips, and fried chicken
Solution
Adults: government; increase the sales tax on junk food / encourage healthy lifestyle e.g. by campaigns
Children: more healthy food at home/ strict control of school canteens And so? decreases the intake of unhealthy food
Body 2
Main idea 2 Inactive lifestyle. Modern facilities make us lazy. Too much time in front of the screen / less exercise outdoors. energy transfers into fat and so? leads to health problems
Body 2
Solution for the Main idea 2
Controlling the screen timing / exercising. And so? burn energy, keep fit and healthy. Also affects mental health
Conclusion
Obesity serious problem. Affecting all ages of people. Causes; are unhealthy food and inactive lifestyle. Solutions; making unhealthy food expensive and encourage healthy lifestyle.
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